Josh+Poetic+Writing

SILKY MISTS The Silky white mists of the beach blinding the soft water While the mighty rocks try to make a sage environment for the fish swimming below Sea weeds tangling all fish that swim past Strange creature’s lurking from every dark corner The sunset glooms like sun in the dark, penetrating through the darkness like a knife through warm butter Clouds sleep above the heavenly mists looking down on the creatures below Night falls, sharks come out to hunt hiding in the mists the fish try and survive until sunset Fish getting pulled from their families dragged to some of the worst places under the sea Moss hidden on the rocks trying not to get washed under water Siren sounds attract every living thing that lies near Waves of the sea glistens like diamonds in the sun The calm sounds of the sea soothe the birds that fly by The mountains in the near distance staring into space The jagged rocks cradle the water The wind blows the water in every direction, waves thrashing onto the rocks

**My Assessed Poetry ** //Excellence Excellence is a young, healthy, fit, and intelligent person. His mom and dad are Perseverance and Success. He also has two brothers, Effort and Respect. He is the oldest of all his brothers. Excellence is well known by the community and everybody wants to be like him. They all say he’s got the sweet life his boat and his two storey house in New Zealand.// //He is tall, he has a muscular build, He has short brown hair, bright blue eyes and a flawless smile. Excellence is a kind person and he gives a lot away to charity. He is known to be best at everything, it doesn’t matter what it is.// //Excellence is the manager of Fonterra. Fonterra has been in Excellence’s family for generations, He has given up nearly everything for it but has also gained a lot. I first met Excellence at Fonterra when I was visiting my mate Allen Norris. Excellence was supervising to make sure everything was going as planned.// //Excellence is a very nice man. He is good at everything he does be it sport, work or play. If you go to Fonterra on Tuesdays and Wednesdays you will see him down there. Excellence retired one year ago and now you can see him speeding down the streets of Auckland.// //Excellence is the part of you that makes you shine; that makes you standout everybody can find Excellence inside of them no matter how little he is inside you. Everybody has Excellence inside of them even if they don’t know it’s there.//